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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for review tag.

I was pleased to come back and read another chapter of this story. I quite liked it! I enjoyed your description of the battle, it wasn't too action-oriented that I'd get bored and not way too descriptive either - just right. The way things turned out was a little sad and that came through the tone of the chapter which was good. I liked the interaction between Godric and the children. The way Rowena came up with the idea of the school was pretty clever too, and I liked the way you incorporated it.

If I were to give you any CC, I'd just say that perhaps you should try working more on your dialogue to make it seem like they're people of that era. Your narrative is fine in that aspect but the dialogue and the manner of talking is still a bit modern-ish. Rest, good job!

Great going!
Keep writing.

9/10
Cheers
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Thank you :) As for the dialogue - I know it's anachronistic, but technically so is the fact that they're speaking English at all ;) I will try to fix that though. Thanks!

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