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Review:marauderfan says:
Review Tag! I had actually been planning to read this story anyway, so this gave me the perfect opportunity. Also, I was going to just read the first chapter for now but it was oh so suspenseful so I had to keep going. You started this off really well. The prologue definitely pulls the reader in - it was short, full of action and raises lots of questions. I liked it.

So this chapter: I like the way you've characterised the Slytherins. They're nice to each other and have all known each other from childhood, which is cool. You've created a nice feel of community. I like Tor as a narrator. I'm really interested to see the story unfold through her eyes, and how she transforms from the normal fourth year Slytherin to the rebel who's falling apart at the seams as she came across in the prologue. One thing I did wonder though - I'm assuming this is Astoria Greengrass, since you mentioned her sister is Daphne, so why does she say her last name is Yaxley?

That minor question aside, I really enjoyed this so far! You have the beginnings of a great story here. :)

Author's Response: Hello! :)

I'm so glad you liked the prologue, and it made you want to keep reading! :) That makes me very happy. I'm a little insecure about these early chapters, so recieving positive feedback is really lovely.

As for this chapter, I'm glad you're enjoying the Slytherins so far. I kind of threw in a lot of OCs at once, since we don't really know anything about the fourth years. I'm glad you enjoyed Tor as well, and yes, she certainly does go through great changes in perspective and action throughout the story! :) She's Astoria Greengrass, but her father is Yaxley: she just goes by her mother's name at school. I liked Yaxley a lot and wanted to integrate him, and this way she gets a different name than the traditional Astoria Greengrass, Draco's wife, since she's a lot more than that! It's explained a little better in upcoming chapters.

Thank you for this really lovely review, and hopefully you'll have a chance to come back at some point! :D


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