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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello there!

I really, really loved this chapter! First of all, it feels as if weíre going to meet Victoire soon. It was mainly due to Teddy deciding to begin running and I suppose heís running to her. I really canít wait to see that confrontation as both of their personalities are so volatile and extreme almost that I canít predict what may happen when they do finally meet in the present.

I didnít think that their relationship could get any more complex but it did. It seems as if Teddy and Victoire almost have this magnetic pull to one another and even though they feel such intense feelings for one another, both good and bad ones, they canít leave. It was shown when even though Teddy saw Victoire with another man he still stayed watching and even though it was hurting him it was as if he didnít have the strength to leave her.

Your descriptions in that scene were amazing ♥ They all flowed so brilliantly and had such wonderful imagery that it was almost like poetry. I really liked this Ďexposing your white skin, your shieldĎ as it kind of showed how many insecurities Victoire has and that sheís hiding so much about herself one would never really know what sheís thinking.

Even though I should hate Victoire as it should be my natural reaction thereís still something there which pulls me to. I think itís the way youíve made her so tortured and vulnerable I want to get to the root of the problem and find out whatís causing her to act like that before judging her. I really love reading tortured Victoire though; itís a lot more fun than happy Victoire!

Gah this line Ď"If you loved me, you'd understand."í It was so powerful and showed how twisted her mind set is. I canít even come to a conclusion about what she could be meaning as her idea of reality is so warped at times. My only reasoning is that Teddy didnít love her so it caused her to do this so she could feel the love she never got.

I adored this chapter ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello there too!

I know - it's exciting stuff! It was great to write this massive build up until they finally meet. There's been so much mention and description of Victoire that readers are itching to finally meet her, to see whether it's just Teddy being a biased, unreliable narrator or whether she's genuinely crazy. I guess you'll find out which one is right soone nough!

I really wanted readers to have a better sense of the characters as the writing style means that descriptions and introductions and backstories are all left out, and I hoped this narrative did that. I needed to show their unhealthy relationship - Victoire is a monster (her mother's got Veela blood, her father was bitten by a werewolf) and Teddy keeps wanting to get revenge. He has these dark, angry thoughts but then when he sees her, he can't help but fall under her charms.

Ughhh - I never think I can get the balance between too much/too little description right. Especially with this style, you need to get it right; it's very simple, very condensed in some places, and sometimes I just find myself describing the colour of Victoire's lips or the paleness of her skin or the moonlight and the shadows. Emotions are more difficult, more complex.

Dialogue can sometimes ruin things, so I kept it considerably low key. A lot of the spoken lines are actually quite simple and sometimes cliche, but I think it works - especially when she dumps him. I had to restrain myself to not put in 'it's not you, it's me'.

Thanks for reviewing, again! I'm so flattered!


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