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Review:FallenTruths says:
Hi Jami!

Chapter 14 - Lily's new kitten kept her up playing all night? I would know nothing about that. ;)

I really enjoyed all the creative spells you came up with in this chapter. Tachycardia would certainly be helpful for healers more than anyone else I think. I like that you're explaining the healer related spells and potions since Lily is interested in becoming a healer. Lily watching the intimacy of Sirius and Belle's brewing skills was interesting as well. It's funny how something as mundane as brewing a potion can show how close two people are and how well they work together.

The whole situation with James and Lily is getting even more complicated. If James really wants to be with Lily he should just avoid lying to her and say hes doing something for Remus. Lily will find out soon enough on her own anyways. She's a smart girl, and disappearing every time there's a full moon will certainly lead to questions. I wonder if Vernon was the one to hurt the owl? I can't imagine he would be very pleased with Petunia using such magical means to talk to her sister.

Chapter 15 - I love the name Beowulf for a pet! I'm honestly not a huge fan of the poem though. Even some of the translated versions are really hard to get through. Petunia's letter was hilarious. I love how she mentions that she will go through the painful task of reserving her sister a room so that she can attend her wedding. She also doesn't seem affected by the death of their parents at all. Maybe she was mad at her parents for supporting Lily's magical abilities?

THE KISS! You could tell you really spent a lot of time crafting that scene and making it just perfect. I love how you drew out the scene and made it a really big moment for the two of them. I can't wait to see what happens with the couple going forward! I really loved this line, "James knew she didn't like the way she looked when she laughed, but he'd never understand why." He is so perceptive of Lily and how she covers her mouth because she hates how she laughs, and it's sweet he doesn't see the ugliness that Lily does.

A few typos - "the feel of her arms still laced around him was all the could concentrate on" and "I'm so sorry, I shouldn't have..." he began.The (space needed after period)

Alli

Author's Response: Alli Alli! I wish Ben liked cats more. Writing Lily with a kitten made me want one so bad, haha! Don't tell Tryp!

Making up spells is definitely my guilty pleasure in this. I know they get boring and I try so hard to keep myself from focusing too much on the didactic portion of it all, but it's just so much fun!

Vernon! That's a very good guess. You can definitely imagine his fat hands trying to squish an owl...Obviously you know who it really was now ;). But still, Vernon wasn't someone I thought of...

I've never read all of Beowulf. haha. But the owl is little and tiny and that seemed to be such an opposite but fitting name :P. Maybe I'll put 'get through Beowulf' on my to do list. Though I'll just complain to you all the while...

I know romance isn't your favorite, but I'm still so happy you liked the kiss! I was afraid it was too soon, then someone reminded me we ARE 15 chapters in. haha. It wasn't supposed to be just yet, but then it sort of fit really well.

Thank you so much for the typos and for another awesome review ♥ You realize how spoiled I am over here, sitting in my happy review feels, right?

♥ Jami


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