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Review:RachaelBrittain says:
Another great chapter to read, with many mixed emotions springing into view. I only have one suggestion upon the last chapter "Changes" and that is to bring a link between the chapter before and that one as I was rather cofused when Hermione and Draco were on the beach one moment, and then Hermione was christmas shopping the next. I suggest saying something alike "The rest of the time at the summer house was spent in pure delight before returning home as the months past by quickly. Although a night was never repeated alike the one on the beach between Draco and I, we did come closer after that glorious night. Before I knew it Christmas had arrived and two days before I set out upon my final shopping spree..." Or something like that, just to link the two chapters together.

Nevertheless a great chapter to read! and I only hope there will be more to read soon. Keep on writing the great novel.


Author's Response: RachaelBrittain,

I did change a few things in some previous chapter to make the trip to the beach a little later in the year. But I think you are right and a quick transition at the beginning of the chapter is needed. Thank you for the suggestion. I will look it over and revise.

Thank you for continuing to read. I love seeing your reviews.


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