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Review:CambAngst says:
Ooh, fascinating! This epilogue is obviously meant to tease the sequel, but I really loved how it all worked.

I'm racking my brain, trying to divine whatever I can about your three mysterious characters. The visitor doesn't seem to be from around these parts. He wasn't exactly certain where to Apparate into the village, which appears to have caused some inconvenience for him. He's obviously young, still being enrolled at Hogwarts and having just passed his Apparition test. That would suggest that he's a rising Seventh Year, correct? I was suspicious of Paul for a little while there, but this chap has brown eyes and Paul had pale green in the last chapter. Also, if Paul and Brienne had lessons together, that would make him a rising Sixth Year, like her. Hmmnnn...

The bodyguard seems like quite a piece of work. Not very bright, but fairly handy with his wand. Brutish and self-assured and not shy about letting the visitor know that he isn't very impressed.

His face was older than his years, folded in lines of long-endured hatred and anger. -- Nope, the bodyguard doesn't sound like a very nice fellow at all. I was all but convinced that Voldemort was going to be inside the house when they entered, but then we meet...

The mystery woman, who was amazingly intriguing and gave me chills at the same time. Part of me wanted desperately to believe that the mystery woman is really Brienne's mother. But it seemed less likely by the time the chapter was over. She exudes darkness and menace in this chapter. She'd be about the right age, though. It's interesting that she was having the visitor place somebody under the Imperius Curse. You also say that she's suffered through something very bad. Gah, so many mixed messages here! Whatever it is, it obviously revolves around Hogwarts and a female student. I have a bad feeling that I know who it is...

So two things I saw that might be typos:

Though Im not sure it was not necessary. -- Was the double negative on purpose?

Why I cannot join you now. Why did I need to Impurise--? -- Is this the French form of Imperius? :p

Otherwise, lovely writing.

Well, I think we're all waiting breathlessly for the first installment of the next story. Don't keep us waiting! :)

Author's Response: Hi again xD

Ooh, mystery! I just love it xD

The visitor is indeed young, is indeed a rising seventh year (though from Hogwarts or...somewhere else, I'm not telling you just yet), and does indeed have brown eyes xD It's not Paul though, I can tell you that.

Voldemort at this point would be off somewhere with Wormtail I think, so definetely not anywhere around here xD Not in these parts.

I'm glad you liked my mysterious woman xD Well "liked" is kind of a loose term when it comes to menacing characters, but you know what I mean xD

Ooh, thanks for those corrections. The first one is a typo that I will fix sharpish :) The second one is meant to be a verb version of "Imperius," like "to Impurise" but I have no idea how to spell that xD

Thank you so much again for your wonderful review :) You won't be waiting for too long, I promise! Thank you again!


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