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Review:Illuminate says:
Hi! Review Tag!

I think this was a great follow up to the opening chapter :) You seem to have good characterisations of Fleur, Bill and the others.

I like how you slowed it down and just showed her immediate reaction. It shows the shock of it all, how her life has now completely changed and she doesn't know how to deal with it. I'm looking forward to seeing how Teddy, Bill and the rest of her family help her through this.

If I could suggest anything I think it would be to maybe describe things a little more- her feelings emotionally and physically, and dialogue are all great, I'm talking more the environment they're in. It might add something to it :)

Overall, great job!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing again.

I am pleased you liked the chapter and the characterisations.

Yeah, I wanted to explore her reaction so glad you liked it. Her family and Teddy will definitely be there for her =)

I'll look into exploring the environment aspect, thanks.

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