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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi! I'm here for our swap--thank you so much for doing this, by the way! I'm really glad I got a chance to read this chapter, because I think it's a really promising start :)

I liked reading from Damon's point of view. He seems like a pretty typical 10 year old, and I'm really interested in getting to know him better. I thought he was really precious with Miss Goshawk, and she had some really funny moments herself. Like this one:

"Miss Goshawk studied me for a moment, she knows me better than anyone else in the world, I know right now she'€™ll come out with a piece of advice that I'll carry with me forever.

"€œI'€™ll have biscuits with my tea today I think."

Or not."

^That part made me laugh out loud, just by the way :D

Loved the mention of Neville near the end, and I think in that last little paragraph you did a great job of capturing the wonder of hearing about Hogwarts for the first time.

Overall I really enjoyed reading this! Your other reviewers have mentioned a couple of grammar things you could work on, but that's the only suggestion I would make. I like Damon a lot so far, and I'll be interested to see where his journey goes from here :) Thanks again for the swap!

--Maggie

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Sorry for the late reply!
I'm glad you like Damon :) and my little joke :p
I really wasn't sure how I would go about the whole Hogwarts speech but then I realized, we all know it :p so I sort of cheated by not making it longer! My grammar changes are in the queue and I'll be beta'ing chapter before release from now on :)
Thabks for the swap!
KO


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