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Review:ginnys twin says:
Interesting. I liked how you described the village at the beginning. Especially the line about how the buildings stood crooked as if afraid to stand strait and alone. I also liked your explanation of why the barmaid and her father stayed. I think it was much more realistic and heartfelt than "we stayed because of the memories we have here." The one thing I think you could improve on is keeping the air of mystery and the dark atmosphere all the way to the end. To me, it felt like as the chapter went on, all the mysterious-ness of it all started going away. As for the vocabulary challenge, I didn't know what most of the words meant, but I looked some of them up, and the ones I did look up seemed to fit well. I also liked the originality behind this. This is the first story I've ever seen about Quirell. Oh, yeah, and I'm here for the 'Claw battle. See you in the common room!

-Krissy

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad that you liked my descriptions and the way the words fit into the chapter. I had a lot of fun trying to make that all fit together. :)

I do see what you mean about the melting away of the air of mystery. I'll definitely try to edit that when I go back and give this story another look!

I haven't seen many stories about Quirrel either, which is why he was the perfect candidate for a story. Thanks so much for your wonderful comments!!

~UnluckyStar57


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