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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
I love the idea of this story and this was such a fantastic first chapter.

Percy has always been a fascinating character for me. It was strange, considering how close-knit the Weasleys were, to see this prim, proper man bound to his duty to the Ministry and not his family. I think you really explored his character very well in this chapter. I was pleased to see how Percy viewed himself as the odd one out, how that drove him to bury himself in his work, to be the best at something for once in his life.

"The emotional distance became physical." I loved this line. I'm not exactly sure why, but it really drove home how estranged Percy became from his family.

It saddened me when he saw his father telling him about the Ministry's downfall as a means to undermine his success. Poor Percy.

I really enjoyed the addition of Aberforth's note to explain Percy showing up to the battle and how he gave him a choice. While he said there was "no choice" behind him going to Hogwarts, he still had to stop and think about it. That just speaks volumes of Percy's character. He ISN'T reckless like his brothers but his loyalty to his family runs deep and that ties them all together.

You did a fabulous job with this and I'd be happy to read the remaining chapters when you post them. Just let me know when they're posted!

Also, I LOVE the summary. It's short but makes an impact - perfect. :)

Author's Response: Hi, and thank you so much for reviewing! I'm really glad I got to read your story as well...I love your work :)

I've always found Percy really interesting too. I imagine it must be really hard to feel constantly left out of your own family, and I wanted to portray Percy in a more sympathetic way than Harry sees him in the books. I see that "outsider" mentality driving a lot of Percy's decisions. But at the end of the day the Weasleys are a tight family who love each other, and I wanted to show Percy's end of that here. I'm really glad you liked him :)

Normally I struggle with summaries, but for some reason this one came easily. Haha I guess things just flow sometimes.

I will definitely be letting you know when I update this--thank you so much for the offer! I really appreciate you taking the time to swap with me. This review made my day! Thanks again!

--Maggie


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