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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi Kiana ♥ I really should be doing the reviews for my thread, but when I saw your name in tag I couldn't resist!

First of all, your writing improves every time I'm on your AP. It's always been a pleasure to read, but the way you just keep getting better and better is serious so awesome to watch. Or read, I suppose.

I think you had an awesome combination of background in this chapter without making it feel that way and a jump start for the story. You fit a lot about Rose in without it feeling like you were cramming her down our throat, and that's a huge thing to be able to do. We know she wants to be a serious journalist, that her brother is the one who really has the genius brains, that she suffers a bit from feeling like she needs to live up to her family's standards... though you made it feel like *she* put that pressure on herself and not her family. Which I loved.

I also liked seeing her take something so seriously, and see her as an adult. Next Gen is something I'm likeing more and more, but even in the small amount of stories I've read I've come across a lot of the 'same' Rose, so I really like that yours already has her own personality in my mind!

Showing us her drive was also a really great way to make it clear on why she'd be up and ready to go to Egypt. She's obviously a go getter sort of girl, and just because it isn't the article of a lifetime doesn't mean it wouldn't be the trip of one! And it's still a project she can impress her boss by doing well!

Really awesome first chapter, Kiana! I'm going to make sure I stop back by to read the second!

Author's Response: Hey Jami! I was always like that when I had my review thread, tag was always a lot more tempting :P

I'm so glad that you're finding it's improving! It's means so much for me to hear that, so all I can say is eek really ♥

I'm so glad that you found that there was a combination as it took ages to find a sort of balance so I guess those hours of agonising paid off! Yes the pressure is mainly down to her being ambitious and I'm glad that you picked up on that, as no one else had yet!

I have a similar feeling with next gen as I'm still take baby steps with this era, but Rose's personality was always something that surprised me as it always seemed kind of similar, so I'm trying to make it different here :)

Haha, yeah the article is a pretty minor point in the story as things do begin to change around chapter five, if I remember correctly, so Rose's excitement is justified in a way she doesn't yet know ;)

Thanks for this amazing review, Jami, and I hope you like the second chapter too :D


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