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Review:patronus_charm says:
I know for some strange reason you dislike Rose/Scorpius, but Iíll let that go as Iím so eager to read this. I adore Rose and Scorpius, I adore Romeo and Juliet so I have a feeling this story is going to be good! Oh, I thought I should say I think the link to the chapter image has expired as it just shows the tinypic logo :)

Ok I canít even form words for this review. It was all too perfect by having one of my favourite plays and pairings placed together. Gah it was wonderful. I think the most ingenious idea was their first meeting by having them play chess it was brilliant and so fitting for both of them. Another reason why I liked it was because I guess Rose learnt from her father which made it even more complex in how their relationship developed and generally amazing. I fangirl over your writing too much :P Oh well, it deserves it!

The foreshadowing within this chapter was brilliant and the using the weather to convey was really excellent. I think my favourite line was this one ĎThunder rattled the windows, shaking the castle to its very foundation.í After Rose looked at Scorpius and it was as if it was representing what was going on in both of their minds at that time.

Another thing I really liked is how you managed to keep the whole chapter into the norms of reality. Admittedly, the whole plot of Romeo and Juliet is questionable at times with the lovers willing to die for one another, but it didnít feel like it here. I think it was the constant use of foreshadowing here which prevented it from turning into one of the stories. Oh dear, now itís got me worried that thereís going to be death involved. I mean, that is the whole plot of Romeo and Juliet but maybe this one will have a twist.

One thing which was so great about this chapter was the slight dash of humour when talking about everyoneís reactions to Roseís win. It was rather unexpected but it added something more real to the story and it was useful for weaving in a little backstory about where each character belongs which was great as I always feel disorientated by not knowing.

This was an amazing start and I canít wait to read on :D

-Kiana

Author's Response: It's not strange to dislike Rose/Scorpius! It's more that I don't like popular things, especially when fandom blows them out of proportion. People treat it as a canon ship even though it's not, and that kind of thing bothers me - I'm apparently more of a canon stickler than I thought possible. :P Better yet, I really dislike Romeo and Juliet, so you can just expect that this story isn't going to end well at all. But it's a story I really enjoyed writing because I was able to take on the Gothic in a way I hadn't done before. This story is a lot more violent and horrifying than my other stories, and it was interesting to learn just what I could do with that kind of writing.

I'm very glad to hear that you enjoyed this first chapter - it's my favourite of the story, and it could easily stand on its own as a one-shot. Chess is a perfect game for Rose because she can draw from both her parents' knowledge and skills. It means a lot that you liked this chapter so much! :D

Keeping part of this story somewhat realistic was important. I don't know if "realistic" is the right word, actually - I wanted to make their relationship grow in a more natural, though no less disturbing way. So although Scorpius has that world-crashing-around-him moment, neither he nor Rose runs headlong into a tragic relationship. It instead builds slowly. The connection is there, and it's powerful, but neither character knows what to do with it yet. For Rose this is particularly important because she needs to know how it will benefit her.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing! It's always a treat to hear from you! ^_^


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