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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, there! Ever since the Cranium game, I've been wanting an opportunity to check out some of your work. I see you in Review Tag all the time, but you're a hard one to catch. Somebody always seems to pounce on your post within minutes. Here I am at last!

I thought you did a really good job of writing the action scenes in this. Even though we know what's going to happen, you brought a lot of tension and nail-biting suspense to the narrative. It was easy to imagine the spells flying and the trees being blown apart as Dean tries to escape from the Snatchers.

I liked the canon details you were able to weave into the story, as well as Dean's reactions to them. The loss of Ted Tonks was obviously something he felt very badly about. And the sense of responsibility he feels for keeping Griphook safe, even though he knows that the goblin feels no such loyalty toward him, was another nice touch. His recollections of learning to fight with the D.A., sparring with Seamus and even the horrible memories invoked by the Dementors all helped to fill out his character.

Scabior and Greyback were also well written. The primal menace of the werewolf and the smug self-importance of the grubby, low-class wizard both really came through.

Your writing was really good in this. It all flowed nicely and there was a nice balance between narrative, exposition and dialog. You didn't overuse any words and it didn't sound awkward or sing-songy. There were no typos or grammatical problems that I could see. Overall a lovely job.

Author's Response: Hello! Your reviews are practically famous so I was really excited to get this!

Action scenes are something I haven't actually written very often, so it's really reassuring to know that it doesn't seem too stilted or unrealistic. I think the fact that we know what happens kind of makes it easier to read this (well, it made it easier for me to write, anyway) but I did still want the suspense and tension there.

I think canon details make stories seem more believable, because the reader's able to relate to them, so I'm glad you liked the inclusion of them here.

The characterisation is something I make a lot of effort with, and I feel it's important to add some depth to each character, especially if it's a one-shot. I'm really happy you were able to pick up on those details I included about Dean, and Scabior and Greyback are really horrible, aren't they?

This review really made me so happy! Thank you for the compliment on my writing and the lovely review!

Sian :)


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