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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello there, calling in from Team Blue :)

I really liked the build-up to Lucy stepping out as I thought it was going to Cassiopeia so I was surprised to see her. I really liked the idea of her being an evil Slytherin as Iíve never seen that done before so it was really cool and unique thing to do.

I adored this line Ďthat bumbling Freudianí and the whole idea that Lucy was going to give him psychological help as I never saw that coming. Then the idea that Lucy was of a different sect to the others and the way she just put down psychoanalyst was brilliant and had me cracking up. Even though itís so unexpected to see people knowing Freudís work in Harry Potter it somehow works and it was really great.

Then the idea of having a boggart was great and the Darleneís were really scared. I know that you clarified the reason for them being there later on, but I was a little confused at the beginning as I didnít expect to see them and they kind of popped up so perhaps if you included at the beginning as well as after the attack it would be really great.

The idea of the Life and Times of Harry Potter was brilliant especially because Rita wrote it, it sounded just like something she would do. I really liked Lysanderís reaction to see his brother as I donít tend to find sibling affection much in fan fiction so this was a nice surprise, even if Lorcan didnít appreciate it.

I do have a CC. Here you said Ďagainst the (dirty, slimy) wall.í But by putting dirty, slimy into brackets it sort of detracted from the flow so it might be better to remove the brackets.

Anyhow that was a really good chapter and it will be interesting to see where the story goes next :)

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi again!!

Yes, surprise! I thought that it would be fun to have a Weasley Slytherin, and because Lucy is so unexpected, I figured that she would be the perfect choice. In my psych class, we kind of learned that behaviorists were kind of the backwards people of psychology because they don't really believe in the power of cognition. So to me, it kind of fits in with the whole pureblood supremacy thing. There's a war in psychology just as much as there was a war in the Wizarding World, and it's fun to try to parallel them. :)

Sorry for confusing you with the boggarts! It was meant to be a little confusing, but I can definitely go back and edit that for clarity, certainly! I'll also change that (dirty slimy) thing, because, now that you mention it, it really doesn't flow well to have those words in parentheses.

I think that I'm going to write a story about The Life and Times of Harry Potter, just because it would be fun to explore. I'm glad you liked Lysander's love for Lorcan, though it isn't very much appreciated. :D

Thanks again for your review!

~UnluckyStar57


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