Okay, so I really liked most parts of this. Gellert's feelings were portrayed really well, and your descriptions of the setting in the very beginning instantly pulled me in. I like how Ariana was sort of a fraction of his conscience, and how she demanded that he'd tell her the truth in order to be free.
The Dumbledore family have such a tragic story. It was kind of a relief for me, in a strange way, to see that Grindewald was the one who killed Ariana, because I'd feel too horrible for them had it been Albus or Aberforth. So maybe I'll choose to believe your version, that Grindewald did it intentionally! It makes sense, because as you wrote, he wanted to git rid of her. She was in his way. It reminds me so much of the many people Voldemort killed, just because they were in his ways (James, Lily, Cedric, etc.) and that made it really powerful.
I understand that the enormous stuffed penguin was part of the challenge, but it did make it difficult to take it seriously at times. However, given the circumstances, I think you handled it extremely well. If I had tried to pull off something like that, it would have been ridiculous, I'm sure! So I have to congratulate you on that part, anyway, because it's such tricky conditions, and while it seems a bit out of place, it sort of works, in a way. It represents his guilt. I certainly think you have made the best of those circumstances you were given, so you should be content with it!!
I really enjoyed it. I rarely read any stories from Grindewald's POV, so it was very interesting, not to mention very well written!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
I agree, the Dumbledore family had such a tragic story. I know Albus delayed going after Gellert because he feared that Gellert would say that Albus had killed his sister. I find it hard to believe that since there were 3 of them dueling, that they would not be able to tell which spell hit Ariana.
It was sometimes difficult to keep a straight face as I was writing. Once in awhile, an enormous stuffed panda appeared instead of the penguin.
This is a very different story than I typically write. Especially with the protagonist being the villain. That was a first for me.
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!