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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello there, Iím back :D

I really liked how we got to see even more of Teddy and Victoireís relationship in this chapter and itís almost abusive and trying to overpower one another. Victoire so coldly manipulates peopleís emotions and she doesnít even seem to be phased by it. I think itís the way she views herself as something that should be worshipped, almost bordering on the idea of being a deity. It was the comment about how everyone would be beautiful and she would then be worthless which really showed it.

The control of power comes in what she says about others and what she makes others say about herself. It was the shock of Teddyís when heís complimented which really stood out to me, because one would assume that if theyíre dating they would have exchanged compliments and that really highlighted the division of power between the two. Then there was Victoire assuming that Teddy would jump off the cliff with her. She said it so simply it was as if she couldnít comprehend what she was fully asking of him.

Iím intrigued about which man Victoire supposedly killed and the reason why. I have a feeling that Teddy may be talking about his former self when he talked about it, but I suppose I wonít find out until later on so Iíll just have fun with my hypothesising.

One thing I really like and which is really effective is the striking difference between the flashbacks and the present. In the flashbacks Victoireís the dominant one, the one who power whereas Teddy is fully under her control and it seems as if heís in love with her. in the present it seems to be the reverse and itís so different itís hard to almost connect the two together.

Another amazing chapter, and your writing blew me away yet again ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello Kiana! Thanks for coming back again!

Victoire is a bit crazaaay. She's obsessed with her own and other's immortality - hence the obsession with killing herself and others. She thinks she is an angel. She looks like one, Teddy treats her like one. She obviously doesn't fit anywhere on earth because of her psychopathic tendencies. She is incapable of love, but does love Teddy. She talks about him as if he is merely her companion, someone to keep her company.

I think it's so shocking that Teddy had been complimented because he's always the one telling her how beautiful she is, and she becomes obsessed with that as well. In some ways, it's almost his fault that this happened - he shouldn't have encouraged her with his words, with the way he always admired her beauty. They are both monsters. Victoire has Veela blood in her, as well as her father having some werewolf symptoms. In short, they are both monsters. His is more instinctive - the werewolf cannot control his own actions like when he is in his human form - whereas Victoire is much more a praying mantis/black widow sort of a girl. Vicious, manipulative. A cow. I think that's why they clung to each other, in a way.

Ehehe... I guess you'll have to find out about that.

With regards to the structure of the story: usually I focus more on the plot and, even though I think it's important that the story is well written, writing style usually takes second place. I wanted to try something different. In this story, the plot and writing are so closely interwoven, because I wanted to make Teddy's narration as realistic as possible. It's a lot short, choppy sentences because the rhythm flows wells with the way he's running, and he's obvo thinking of Victoire, so there's some flashbacks/memories thrown in as well.

Thanks for reviewing!


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