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Review:Illuminate says:
Hi! Review Tag!

This seems like a great opening chapter :) I like that it opens in the thick of action rather than a lull before anything happens :)

Your description is very good, you can easily imagine everything happening, and it feels like we're right there with her. You build the tension very well, especially when she's unable to Disapparate.

I also like that you only allude to her life, rather than describe it in detail so that it can be demonstrated later :) It also makes me want to meet all of the characters you mention, and know how they react to her being bitten.

Great job!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I am glad you liked this chapter and the action. I worked hard on my descriptions so it's good you could feel the tension and all.

I felt that putting in a lot about her life in the first chapter would be overwhelming so I am glad you liked how I did it. Thanks!


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