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Review:Calypso says:
Hello! I'm here from the Ravenclaw Review Battle!

First off, I've got to say that this was a really original idea for a story- I've never read a playwright in fanfiction before, but it's a great idea, and Pippa (good name by the way!) seems like a very individual character!

I really like your writing style- there's something understated about it that makes it a pleasure to read, and you manage to convey whole scenes or emotions effectively in just a few words.
I liked the descriptions in the first paragraph of her solitary life- you really conjured up her routine and monotony of it.

Your characterisation of James was also great, and the way you wrote his dialogue seemed very realistic. The way he gave her the trip to Paris seemed realistic too- this may not make sense, but it felt very casual and spontaneous, like the way he treated Pippa.
I would have liked to have found out a bit more about her trip to France- what was it about it that changed her? That was the only bit which felt a little under-developed...

I really wasn't expecting that ending! At first I was sort of taken aback by it, but now I think I like it- how it *wasn't* a perfect-live-happily-ever-after ending, but actually felt real. I liked how you showed that even though James left her, she still gained something from him; that even though he broke her heart, her world still went on...

This was a really original, quirky, honest piece of writing! I really enjoyed it!

-Bethany

Author's Response: eeep this is one of my sloppier fics that i'm honestly not too proud of and yet to managed to leave me such a wonderful review! thank you will never be enough

for me the whole thing was really rushed, and i wish i could have written it better. you're right about the trip to paris. it's really abrupt and just stuck there in the middle of the page.

but thank you so much! i'm glad the story managed to still cling on to some "meaning". thank you for taking the time to leave a review ^_^


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