Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
Hey, -BookDinosaur- here with your requested review!

Well, first of all, I just want to say I love Rose as a budding journo in this story, as opposed to the supersmart genius she's always portrayed as in other stories. Also, this story will take place in Eygpt! I love reading stories in other countries. :)

Anyway, down to reviewing. I really like how you've characterised Rose, with her love for her job and so much ambition-I'm surprised she wasn't a Slytherin. ;) She seems really realistic to me, how she felt about her family was very believable, especially with the paragraph about her hair.

That teaser about meeting Scorpius was ver well done as well-now I just want to read on to find out about and meet Scorp.

The CC I would give you is just to look through this chaoter again and maybe rephrase some sentences-there were several places which I thought could be one slightly longer sentence, but you phrased it as two shorter sentences, which made it slightly more awkward to read.

All in all, a really good first chapter that made me want to keep reading.

Author's Response: Hi there -BookDinosaur- :D

I'm so glad that you liked the change in Rose, as I always get so paranoid when starting off next gen characters, especially with Rose, as there are so many cliches attached to them! Yup I love reading and writing stories in other countries as it's infinitely more fun :D

I was tempted to put her in Slytherin but I was worried that might be a little strange. She does show a lot of bravery later on so that justifies the Gryffindor. I'm glad that her thoughts about her family were ok as they worried lme a little.

Haha, I love including teasers they make me desperate to know the answer even though I've planned the entire story!

Ooh thanks for pointing that out. I used to always do run-on sentences so now I try and do anything to avoid them but I may have gone to the extremes!

Thanks for this review, it was really helpful!


Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 478
Submit Report: