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Review:AlexFan says:
Sorry I'm getting to this so incredibly late! I really should learn to manage my time better.

Anyway, moving on.

In general, the flow of the story was really well, as far as I saw there weren't any mistakes and the dialogue flowed pretty well. I found that there were places where it was a bit choppy but other than that I quite liked the chapter.

You had a good balance between dialogue and description and my favourite part of the story was when Merissa went to Diagon Alley. I love how you described everything and I could picture it in my head all of that magic happening and all of those bright colours. I especially enjoyed reading that part.

Your characters are also very believable and I really like Merissa because she seems just so normal and nice. I definitely think that she's an interesting character. Widow Bellum was certainly interesting. For some reason I found the scenes with her very entertaining. She's also really strict, I felt a little bad for Merissa having to sit like there was a board strapped to her back.

Anyway, good job on the chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I will read back through to see if I can't fix the choppy areas.

I agree, it's not fun having to sit up tall all the time. But from what I've read of that time period, it was expected. :(

I'm still trying to find just the right balance of obedience and curiosity for Merissa. Widow Bellum has been fun to write.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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