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Review:patronus_charm says:
I’ve always wanted to read a dark Teddy/Victoire story so when I saw this on your page I got really excited and I’m so glad that I did read it as it really blew me away.

The detail of your descriptions was amazing and I’m still sitting here revelling despite it being several minutes since I finished reading it. You really took care when choosing what to say and each bit fitted together perfectly. I really loved this line ‘Our first meeting haunts my memory, like some obstinate ghost.’ Gah I loved nearly every line in this but it wouldn’t fit in the review box if I quoted everything.

I really loved how complex you made Teddy and Victoire’s relationship, and how bitter you made Teddy as I’ve never seen that done before and I loved it! He talks about how he had no one and was isolated, so it got me thinking about Andromeda and Harry and where were they and what caused him to feel like that and I loved it because the best stories, in my opinion, are the ones where I ask a lot of questions after reading it.

The structure of this was brilliant. I really enjoyed those single line sentences interspersed with the flowing paragraphs as it made really interesting to read and I felt that I connected a lot more with Teddy’s emotions in those parts. Then they increased more and more throughout the chapter almost showing Teddy’s discontent with life and Victoire and I hate sitting here and not knowing why.

Ok I couldn’t help but not quote this two lines as I really did love them ‘Of course, in the light, you were in your element. I was at my weakest.‘ and ‚ I taste victory on the winds. I sense you.‘. I really loved the first as it sort of brought up the idea of the full moon and how he was a werewolf and then the second was really great as the idea of him being able to sense and taste suggested that he held really strong emotions for her and it made me want to know the cause of them.

That was an absolutely amazing first chapter and I’m definitely going to carry on reading this, exam permitting! ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: I've taken a while to respond to these long and luscious reviews because I'm worried my answers won't be up to scratch! I'm so happy you chose to review this story!

I was really worried about uploading this story to the archive, merely because I'm not sure if I like it - it's so different to my other stories, so different to my usual style that I was wary about its reception. It's a bit purplely, and a bit flowery - but I'm so glad you think that's it's good, that really encourages me to write of this sort of thing.

I've wanted to write about Teddy and Victoire, just because (I think) there was this assumption that they would always end up together and Teddy would become a Weasley (I would read 'One and Only' if I were you because it deals with this assumption). Plus they're both so pretty, and also a bit monstrous - Victoire's a bit Veela, plus Bill's a bit werewolf, and Lupin was a werewolf. I loved exploring that bit of their personalities.

Really? The structure? I think that was the bit I was most worried about, just because the flow of the story seemed to stop and start so much... so I'm really glad about your feedback, thank you so much! I love how you've analysed this - I had never really thought about it like that.

Thank you so much for reviewing and for all your lovely comments!


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