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Review:HarrietHopkirk says:
Yay! I love the idea of a fic about Gobstones! This is great stuff and it has great promise! I also love fics written about the Scamander boys and so I really enjoyed this.

First off, I think how you went about setting up the chapter and the opening scenes was brilliant - the contrast between the sunny outside world and then the dark, tense game of Gobstones. Really good. I also liked how you introduced Cassiopeia Prestwich - but I think you could have done more to build the suspense of Lorcan's opponent, if she as feared as you say she is, with maybe some sort of final reveal? Maybe try to describe what she looks like, her personality before revealing her name right at the end of that opening section? I don't know, but I like her character already!

And boy, is she crazy? First threatening Lorcan, then pushing him down the stairs? The chapter started off quite light-hearted compared to this! Ahaha, and I love Lysander too! Overall, a great opening chapter - well done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!

I'm very glad you like the idea of Gobstones and the Scamanders, because when I was trying to decide what I should write about, I thought it would just be so cool to have the twins kind of get on each other's nerves. What resulted was a whole lot of psychology and a really strange sibling relationship. After all, they ARE Luna's children! :)

I'm also very glad that you liked the way I set this up. I really struggled a lot with how to begin, and several times I ended up reverting back to the original, which is what ended up being posted. :p

As far as the reveal of Cassiopeia goes, I do agree that I could probably draw it out a bit more, to make it more suspenseful and over-the-top. I shall definitely edit this after I've posted the third and final chapter!

And yes, she is crazy. They ALL are crazy, in their own little ways. :)

Thank you so much for your comments and suggestions!!


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