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Review:HeyMrsPotter says:
Hello! Here from the forums for your review. I am so so SO sorry it's taken me this long to get around to doing it, it was my birthday over the weekend and then I got a little distracted!
I really really enjoyed this story. I always applaud people who can write well in first person and you are definitely one of them. You set a really good, dark mood throughout which perfectly represents vampires and Lucy's personality.
I love the background you give to how Lucy became a vampire herself (though it did take me a while to figure out it was her, maybe you could mention her name a little earlier or was that intentional?) and I like that it was pretty much Hugo's fault that she turned and now she's turned him and almost feels guilty about it but at the same time is very selfish and thinks of her revenge, it's a nice touch to her character.
You have some amazing lines in here, I won't quote them all as there's about 50! But I particularly loved "And now your eyes are open, and youíre gasping for air you donít actually need" and " tasting so deliciously sweet with just a hint of the Dutch courage you drank before you came to visit me in my little vampireís lair."
The only critique I could give is that I want more! I'd like to know how Lucy reacted when she discovered she couldn't use magic any more, what happened when Hugo woke up, did Lucy ever find out who turned her?
It shows how good your writing is that I want to know more though :)
Thank you for requesting, sorry again about the wait and well done for writing such a fantastic one shot!

Author's Response: Hi Dee! It's no problem at all - I'm more than a little late with this response myself :P (Happy belated birthday, by the way!)

Wow! First person is, Imo, hard for me to write so I am astonished and excited that you think I can write well in first person! XD I really love all of your compliments, and yes - that was intentional, because I felt if I mentioned Lucy's name earlier it would disrupt the flow a little. Yes, it's very much a part of her personality that she loves Hugo, but wants him to suffer, but doesn't want to hurt him because of who he is to her - it's such a tumble of emotions that I love exploring :D

Wo, thank you so much! ♥ I love those lines too, particularly the first one!

Haha, I have actually expanded this one-shot into a novella now, and those questions will be explored in the novella. I'd love to hear your opinions on the future chapters!

Thanks for such a lovely review!


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