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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
-BookDinosaur- here with your requested review!

I really enjoyed reading this, it was fluffy, light and easy to read. The flow was really good, I had no problem reaching the end of this chapter. I especially liked how you managed to jump between years without any disruption of the story.
The only thing I would say disturbed the flow was the spacing, so nothing big, only fussy people like me would be bothered by that anyway. :)

Your characterisation was also really good, James' voice was very believable. Even though it's only the first chapter, I can already see he's outgoing and very confident of himself. Madison seems like a bit of a hothead. ;)

The only CC I can offer is more of a keep-it-in-canon thing, but you say that James' room was decked out in maroon and gold, presumably the Gryffindor colours, but the Gryffindor colours are scarlet and gold. Sorry if it feels like I'm nitpicking, but I'm absolutely obsessed with keeping things canon. ;D

Anyway, overall, I really liked this chapter and it was a brilliant start to your story.

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for reviewing this!

I've been meaning to fix the spacing for a while, actually, so thank you for reminding me about that. :)

I'm glad that you like their characterizations, as I will start building on them as the story goes on. :)

Ack, the colours. I will fix that ASAP. :P

Thanks so much for reviewing this, and I'll be back to re-request!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

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