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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello! :) I'm finally here for your review, and I'm very sorry about the wait!

I really liked this chapter, and the incredible depth you brought to the typically flat, evil Lestrange. I love the idea that he actually truly loved Bellatrix, and it was interesting how that kind of developed after they were married, and how the traits which made her so awful- her determination and single-mindedness- made him love her.

I felt so sad for Lestrange, both because Bellatrix couldn't really care to love him back, and because of how desperate he is. It's interesting how he's not so upset about the fall of Voldy as he is about losing his Bella.

I think you could consider fleshing this lovely short out a little more and adding more memories and depth. I really liked how with Greyback you went back to certain events in his life and really created a full picture, and I'd love to see more of that with this chapter. Even just little details, like how he and Bellatrix got involved with Voldy, his relationship with his brother or the Black sisters or other cronies, whether they ever considered having children, or being separated in Azkaban could be fun to add! :)

Also, am I right in thinking this is the last chapter? I think you should consider writing more anecdotes, and giving a really full picture of many of the Death Eaters. It's such a cool idea and you've gone into such thoughtful depth, and I'd love to read more! One idea I had that might be kind of cool could be to end the story with a chapter about Voldy himself, in the few moments as he died or what became of the remnants of his soul... or even how the rest of the wizarding world recovered and treated the other DEs! There's so much potential and so many people's fates to explore, and you write it so well! :)

I hope this review was at least a little helpful, and I really enjoyed following your story! You're always welcome to request for another story! :)

Author's Response: Hi! It's no biggie - as you can see, it's taken me a while to respond too.

I really love fleshing out flat characters, because there's so much you can to with them. It's so often assumed that the Lestranges had a loveless marriage, so I decided to completely challenge that here. :)

I really like that idea of adding more details to his story, and I may go back and do that soon!

This technically was the last chapter, however, I may be writing a fourth for a challenge, so there may be more!

I'm glad you liked this, and thanks so much for reviewing!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)


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