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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
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For some unexplained reason, I don't often venture into the werewolf corner of HP fanfic. Which is a pity, as I quite like werewolves, and I very much enjoyed the beginning of this story!

You set the scene very well in the beginning, with the mud and the lonely cottage in the middle of a stormy night. This is just a matter of taste, but, thinking back to what happens in the end, accentuating the presence of the full moon might have been interesting, don't you think? I can just imagine her nervously glancing up towards the piercing circle of light as she hurries along the path, slightly loosing her composition and slipping as the fear briefly takes over. don't take this as critique - it's more a suggestion, really. i just really like me some horror!

I find the premise very interesting. A journalist (with a bordering on traumatic family history concerning werewolves) going out into the field to study the creatures - open mind and all. Then she gets carried away and pays the price. You have me intrigued, that's for sure. I must admit though, I was hoping for some flashbacks to what she actually discovered during that week - what is the main line of her story? It would make for an interesting contrast to the terrying night if, in the back of her mind, she could be remembering how she was trying to understand these people only days ago, that they have feelings and names, make jokes and are just like her - but now she must run for her life, because the beast has taken over. So, to put it in review-terms, i found that this chapter, although gripping, relied a tad more on telling than on showing, or even on action, than it could have. But again, it's all a matter of preference :) Glad I clicked on this, cheers!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I quite like werewolves too, and surprisingly I haven't read a werewolf fanfic before. This plunny suddenly attacked me one day and I decided to write it =)

I am glad you liked the way I set the scene. I think accentuating the presence of the full moon would actually be a great idea, I'll surely do it when I edit, thanks! I love horror too xD

I am pleased you find the premise interesting. Indeed, the journalist in Dom did get carried away and now she's paying the price, though everything may not be as it seems just yet. More on her article, the flashbacks on the story she was covering etc., are in chapter six (when she finalises the article)! I like your idea of including that contrast of them having feelings and names and stuff, and then running from them, I may just include it, thanks!

Thank you for your comments, I'll surely take them into consideration.


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