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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
-BookDinosaur- here with your requested review!

I loved Neville's POV. He was very canon and the way he thought was much simpler than the others we've seen, which I appreciated.

The description you put in of everyone who attended the funeral and the funeral itself was very good, I could really see everything in my mind's eye.

Just a mistake I caught-You say 'Before Harry and Ginny had their shining moment, Harry had been sitting...' That isn't possible according to canon, because before Harry came into the common room, he was doing a detention. I think that is supposed to be 'after Harry and Ginny...' If it was meant to be that way, the ignore this. :)
Also, when Neville is describing Harry and Ginmny's kiss, you say 'heedless that the entire room was watching.' I think that should be 'heedless of the entire room watching them.' Just a suggestion!

All in all, a great chapter that left me wanting more.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I've updated it to read "A few days before Harry and Ginny had their shining moment..." making a better reference of time for the reason why Harry was sitting in detention instead of playing Quidditch.

I've also fixed the phrase as you suggested "...heedless of the entire room watching them in various states of astonishment."

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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