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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums. Sorry it took me a while.

This was surely an interesting piece of writing. I liked how you wrote from Fenrir's point of view and gave him a backstory that sort of went with canon in a way. You expressed his 'emotions' quite well too and I was definitely drawn into the piece while reading.

Your vocabulary, grammar, and over all writing style was pretty good as well and the narrative flowed smoothly. I absolutely enjoyed your descriptions, they were nicely written and brought the scene to life. As I mentioned before, Fenrir's characterization was pretty well done.

The only CC I'd give you is to perhaps include a bit more sensory detail - such as more visual descriptions and imagery. It would definitely enhance the mood of the story and make it all the more interesting.

Apart from that, this was pretty good and I enjoyed it. Feel free to re-request for the next chapter!

9/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi!

Fenrir was a fun character to write about, because he's kind of a fill-in-the-blank character, because we know he's a werewolf, and that he works for Voldemort, but not much else, so there's a lot of room for interpretation.

I'm glad you thought it flowed well, and that the characterization was good. :)

I may go back and add in some sensory detail, because I agree, it would make the story more interesting.

Thanks so much for reviewing, and I'll definitely be back for the second chapter!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)


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