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Review:patronus_charm says:
Wow I really love what youíve done with Dom. Iíve never seen her portrayed so bitterly and unWeasley like before, but I really love it. I think this line ĎSmiling was against some very un-Weasley portion of her constitution.í Shows exactly how different she really is. Gah Iím just sitting here amazed by it. Even though Dom doesnít make herself likeable to others I like her because of her differences to the rest of the Weasley clan.

I really like how youíve made Rose almost disconnected from England and that she canít relate to it or understand it. Itís really great that youíve shown that sheís still almost suffering from such a monumental change and it will probably continue to cause her to suffer as things like that rarely reach a conclusion because if she goes back to China she wonít find any peace of mind there as sheíll want to be back here.

Andromeda was lovely and it was nice to see that she was being included into the Weasley clan. I always felt sorry for her as she lost nearly everything during the war and I always wondered what her and Teddyís relationship would be like and I really like how youíve portrayed it here.

The way youíve built up tension between Teddy and Rose is great. I think Roseís longing for China is always going to be a sticking point between the two and it will be interesting to see what happens when they finally talk to one another and their true feelings erupt. Theyíre both rather unique characters and different to other people so I canít really predict what may happen between the two.

I like how youíve made Rose have other issues in her life too and they kind of relate back to China. Sheís struggling with being an adult and being a domestic person and I suppose in China she could be free and whatever she wished too as it had a mystical power over her and I suppose being in England means she lacks freedom and is a lot more constrained. Itís really interesting to ponder how these issues are going to continue to affect Rose.

The conversation between Teddy and Rose was great. I forgot about Victoire being an issue for them too. They have way too many problems between them at the moment and I really hope they manage to resolve them. I canít wait for the next chapter and I can see youíve started writing it so I hope itís up soon :D Now I have to go and decide which WIP to catch up with next :)

-Kiana

Author's Response: Oh wow! I wasn't expecting such a positive reaction to my characterization of Dominique! With her, I wanted to not only find a different way of portraying her, but also use her to represent another kind of personality, one that I haven't seen much of in literature (though I see it in real life). Dom has thrown herself into her work and is incredibly passionate about it, to the point that she doesn't really know how to deal with people - it makes her come off as bitter and unpleasant, but really she's just not the sociable type. I thought of adding a scene where she and Rose end up talking about cooking, and that would have set Dom in a better light - maybe I'll be able to include it in a later chapter. It's also exciting to find new ways of writing the Weasley cousins. It's been too easy for fandom to characterize them in specific ways, so it's good to interpret these characters in my own way and see where it takes me. :)

Rose's alienation is something I've seen happen to those who have studied away from home, and when they return, they're not the same - they've had new experiences and it suddenly becomes harder to relate to those who stayed behind. I don't know whether Rose would feel the same if she returned to China - there, she was suddenly the only Weasley, and while it can be alienating to live in a different culture, she seemed to feel as though she had more purpose there. Certainly she had more freedom, no family ties to keep her in one place. But she can't go back - it wouldn't be the same now that she's no longer an apprentice. It's the memory of her experience there that she holds on to, and one of the major things she has to learn in this story is how to construct the kind of life she wants in the best way that she can. She'll never stop missing her life in China, but she has to see that she can have that kind of life in England too.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing this story! ^_^ It's lovely of you to give so many long reviews!


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