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Review:BellaFan202 says:
Hi! So glad you decided to request this chapter! :)

This had a really capturing start. The nightmare was scary (which is good) and everything else just felt so real. The whole time, I had this like tightness in my chest, which is how I know this was a really great chapter. I really enjoyed it. I felt really bad for Dominique the whole time. I really felt like I was right there with her.

Now, that being said, the only things I can think of to say that might need to be improved are that maybe you could read over the chapter to fix small mistakes. Nothing to major, but a couple of sentences were a little bit difficult to read and understand. Also, the dialogue doesn't really seem like dialogue. Especially the way Dominique was talking. I feel like none of them would have been quite that eloquent, considering the recent events. They all seemed like it was really easy to grasp what had happened, which is a little bit unbelievable. I feel like they should have not really been quite so understanding. I don't think understanding is the right word, but you know what I mean, I hope. Granted, they were perfectly scared and worried for Dominique, but they all already seemed like they had accepted the worst, especially Dominique. So, unless they're really well adjusted, I feel like that's not quite believable.

But other than that, I really felt everyone's pain this chapter, and I really enjoyed reading it, even if it hurt. :P

Thanks so much, and don't forget to request the next chapter! :)

~BellaFan202~

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing again.

I am glad you liked the nightmare, and everything else felt real. It's good to know you enjoyed it and could feel for Dominique.

I am not too good with dialogue so I'll try to go back and re-read and fix it, thanks. Well, the family had had time to deal with the situation and they were trying to be strong for Dominique - that was what I was trying to portray. Dominique is an impulsive person and she was quite dramatic and hysteric in this chapter, but I am sorry if it gave you the wrong idea that they had all accepted the worst already. I'll try to go back and edit what I can but I am not sure if there's much I can change as the chapter aligns with my plot for the most part. Thanks a ton for your comments though!

Thank you for your review.


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