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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hello!

Hey there, I thought that I would do like I said and stop by but it was naughty of me to read this entire chapter without leaving a review last night but here I am. :D
The things you do to me! I wasn't certain whether to scream along with Draco or not because, honestly, it seems as if everyone is against him at some point.
What I really liked was the beginning with Isadore and Astoria, it really showed the contrast between the two girls and I really do think that's a good thing. For a while we're so caught up in the angst and attraction that its sort of hard to see the rational side of things. Isadore pointed out a very good dose of reality for Astoria, who is still bouncing from thinking she's in love to wondering if he's a passing fancy. Somehow, I think she might have to discover that for herself but I did admire her courage to stand up to her father. It took some steel and it was obviously hard for her but it was more than obvious that her parents find her interest in Draco to be a losing situation. From her father's POV I can understand how he feels but Astoria has so much hope that its hard to really care. I'm not sure if her hope in Draco, by this last bit of the chapter will bite her later or if you're hinting on that but I'm eager for their relationship to grow or crumble. Hopefully, it doesn't! D':
Nice little addition of Snape in this too, I was a tad surprised that he would have anything to say at all but it was great hearing his opinion. Though I'm sure what he said sort of praised and dissed Draco all at once, it was an honest truth that Astoria may have needed to hear.
I thought your Snape was pretty spot on too, just as another thing, I still remember your one-shot about career day. Hahaha.
On to Draco then! I find the way you write him to be simply fantastic and I have no idea how you do it, he feels so real and so tormented that I can't help but feel sorry for him. And at the same time, I'm rooting for him to get better but the confrontation with his father had me worried.
It was wonderfully written and the failing health of his father must have been hard to see after years of admiring him. I think playing on that was really well-done but I'm so thankful that Draco stood up to him as well, which shows a major growth of character.
But I'm worried for what Lucius has planned and what he's been up to. I know that it won't be good of course but its going to be an amazing read and this ending! NOOO!! Draco drink apple juice instead! ARGH! >_<
The poor thing! I have to keep on reading now!
Thanks for the awesome read!
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Hi, Gabbie! I'm so happy you're back!

I can see why it seems that everyone is against Draco at some point. In fairness, I suppose, he's tormented nearly all of them at some point in his life, holding his family's wealth and influence over their heads. Payback isn't fun, but he's definitely growing up.

Isadore is good for Astoria. She genuinely cares about Astoria and she's more worldly, especially when it comes to the opposite sex. That's going to be a fairly big deal in chapter 10. ;) But, she's a little shallow and self-absorbed, as well. That's actually helpful to Astoria because she can see some of her own bad traits reflected in Isadore.

Astoria's father has been really difficult for me to write, finding that balance between being too normal and too caricatured, a la Lucius Malfoy. Astoria's parents love her dearly and they want what's best for her, it's just that their definition of "what's best" is rapidly diverging from what Astoria wants for herself.

I'm really pleased that you liked Snape. That was originally going to be Dumbledore's portrait, but I realized that Astoria and Snape probably had a lot more in common.

Aww, that's so nice of you to say about Draco. I get in a certain groove with him sometimes where his character just makes sense. When that happens, I should seriously lock myself in a room and just write until it runs out. Lucius's decline is much harder on him than he's willing to admit.

Draco had a pretty serious relapse. It was bound to happen eventually, I think. The poor guy's putting a ton of pressure on himself. Hopefully he bounces back. ;)

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I've missed you!


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