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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi there! Review Tag!

Okay -- I've read a few different stories about Dominique and Teddy being unfaithful behind Victoire's back. This is by far my favorite.

You captured something that I feel like most authors aren't able to: the absolute pain this puts Dominique in. It isn't just he own pain, but what she's doing to her sister and that made a big difference for me.

You also made her weak, very weak, with the memory of the strong girl she used to be. Again, something I absolutely loved. I loved how she couldn't let go and she *knew* how stupid she was being, but she couldn't walk away from it. She was too weak to tell him goodbye, too in loved with him in such a terrible terrible way. They're so bad for one another and hurting so many people in their path, but it's killing Dom just as much and i love that.

This is hands down one of the most realistic from the mistress's PoV story I've read. You made sure not to leave anything out. Her anger at Teddy, her anger at herself, her disgust with both of them, her jealousy of Victoire even though she knows that it's *her* fault and not her sister's. And more than anything her desperate desire to go back to that time when she was young, when she would have laughed at a stupid girl doing this sort of thing.

This was a really impressive one shot. I really enjoyed it!

Jami

Author's Response: Hello there! Wow, thankyou so much for this review!

I'm so glad that you enjoyed this and that Dominique made sense as a character. When I wrote this, it felt more like of a story about an unhealthy, destructive relationship than a story about infidelity, so I was trying to put her weakness and misery at the forefront- it's absolutely wonderful to know that that came off well!

You're completely right about all those emotions, and it's fantastic to know that these things make sense! I think that somebody in Dominique's position would have to be pretty broken up to end up there...

This was such a lovely review to get! You seem to have got exactly what I hoped people would from this story- thank you so much for taking the time to comment on it!

-Bethany


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