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Review:Calypso says:
Saw you in the review tag thread and decided to come and see how Tor's doing- and I'm glad that I did!

I absolutely loved finding out a bit more about her background- it was very interesting. As with so much of this story, it's fascinating to see the wizarding world through the eyes of the other side, and you did that really well in this chapter, simultaneously highlighting how dangerous these people are, and how- essentially- they are just people. I like that you show your characters' good qualities alongside their blood status prejudices, so that I find myself almost rooting for the Death Eaters!

I liked the way you showed how important the Dark Lord is to the Yaxleys' lives- how Tor's father was willing to miss her birth to help Voldemort- it showed how much power he has over the lives of so many people.

I noticed one typo, near the beginning: you put "there's even been three Ministers..." and I think it should be "there have even been three Ministers..."?

Ooh and Tor is an Occlumens? I liked the story of how she found out she could do it- how it was instinctive, and not something she was trying to achieve. I also thought it was realistic that her father wouldn't teach her the most complicated Legilimency, as she was only a child.
The way he reacted to discovering her ability seemed very natural for the character you've built for him- that she would rise in his affections over Daphne (although Daphne doesn't seem as if she'd take well to such treatment!)

And the scene in the garden where the kids were playing Hogwarts together was just so cute! :P

Another great chapter! It was fascinating to get a glimpse of Tor's background- I really enjoyed reading it!

-Bethany

Author's Response: Hi! :) Great to see you back!

I'm glad you liked this chapter, and learning more about Tor's background. I wanted to give her a little more depth and explain about why she is the way she is, it was great to get into their family history.

I'm glad you picked up on the DE relations with Voldy, and yes how Yaxley missed his daughter's birth. It was interesting imagining these big life events and how Voldy figures into them.

Ah yes, Tor is a bit of a natural, since she's very controlled and perceptive. I thought it would be a fun twist, and it comes into play later in the story as well. She's nowhere near being trained, she just has an aptitude for Occlumency! :) And you're right, Daphne definitely doesn't appreciate being inferior in any way! :P

Aw, I liked that scene too! I really want readers to root for the Slytherins and see them as playful, ordinary people who happened to be raised with certain values. I love writing them! :)

Thank you for another wonderful review! :D


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