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Review:BellaFan202 says:
Hi!

Nice second chapter! I definitely feel like this could really be a good story. Well, it is already, but you know what I mean. (By the way, I apologize in advance for anything stupid that I say. It's getting late here and I woke up pretty early this morning. So. sorry.)

I feel like Regulus was quite a bit like Sirius, and I'm not exactly sure what to think about that. I feel like he's just a little too... loosey goosey if you ask me. Still a likeable character for me, but it's difficult for me to wrap my brain around Regulus acting like that, even after chilling for fourty years. Or something like that. I dunno. Other than that, though I really liked him. I feel like I would like him a bit more if I thought of him as an OC, so maybe I'll do that instead. :P

It seemed to flow rather well. You didn't stick on a certain thing too long, which was nice. The dialogue was good, because it flowed well too. And you always gotta love some super-subtle foreshadowing right? I always gotta love it. (that wasn't sarcasm, by the way, just it case it sounded like it was. I actually really do love it. In small amounts anyway.) I definitely can't wait to see what Regulus was talking about.

Anyway, don't forget to request the next chapter when it's posted! :)

~BellaFan202~

Author's Response: Hello! And so sorry about the late reply!

I made Regulus a lot like Sirius on purpose. They were brothers, after all, and I felt that connection hadn't really been explored, and I was excited by where it could lead. He is a bit scatter brained in this chapter, but I promise, I want to give him a little depth!

Thank goodness the dialogue flowed well! The first half is pretty dialogue heavy, and I think for a character like Regulus, as well as Ellie to some extent, mad dialogue skillz are very much required!

Thanks for the lovely review!


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