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Review:MadiMalfoy says:
MadiMalfoy here with your requested review! :)

OMG I have been looking for that song for AGES! :D You just made my night!

*Ahem* Well, you have lots of good things in this piece! With characterization, you captured a different side of James II that I really liked. He's not the outgoing, jokester like the canon form of him is. He's a sensitive, quiet, caring Gryffindor instead. With Arianna, I can't say very much as she is your OC so I will only say a few things. You wrote her phenomenally, and with such minimalistic detail that it left me feeling like there wasn't much more to her story that couldn't already be inferred.

Such a sad story though, but it fits with the song perfectly. James wants to rescue her, save her from taking her life. He has to use his Gryffindor courage to do it. Arianna doesn't feel her life is worth living for anymore because of the hate she gets from the girls in Hogwarts and the pain her father makes her feel because she "caused" her mother's death. Great song choice for this piece by the way, it works so much better than you think it does.

Fantastic, depressing, well-written piece! Request more reviews! :) xx
~MadiMalfoy

Author's Response: Hi Madi! I really love that song, and this story just kind of fell together as I was listening to it. :)

I definitely think that James could have grown up since the epilogue, so I kinda showed that in here. And Arianna is definitely a really deep character, but I can only show so much of that here. I'm glad that the potential is visible here though. :)

I'm so glad you liked this, and thanks so much for reviewing! I will definitely be back to re-request! :)

-ShadowRose (Taylor)


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