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Review:MadiMalfoy says:
Here with your requested review!

The plot flow was very smooth, very well-done in this chapter! I think that it is very plausible in the way you wrote it so that Draco received his mission and Dark Mark at the same time. You showed his, and everyone else's, emotions very well with superb, defining descriptive words for each emotion. Such great description in this chapter as well!

Draco's characterization was very close to canon--so fantastic job there! I liked the bit of how he thought Pansy was annoying--he does end up marrying Astoria, so I think it'd be fun to put in a little snippet about how Astoria was so much less irritating, just to hint at the future. :) His fear being hidden by a mask of neutrality and confidence is spot-on! You wrote him very well, I think you should write some more Draco pieces in the future, you write him very well. :) Great job on this chapter! xx
~MadiMalfoy

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I added a note to include a mention of Astoria as a hint.

I will definitely consider writing more Draco pieces. I've also added a note in my novel to include more of Draco than I have.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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