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Review:Lululuna says:
Gillywaters sound awful! They remind me of that fizzy water business for some reason, but definitely sound like the sort of bland, homogenous drink Pansy would want her little followers to consume. I feel so bad for Daphne, having to put up with them invading the space she's worked so hard to build up, and having to confront the past like this.

It's very interesting that Adrian was there: poor Astoria! The awkward vibe, which Pansy surely relished, was very clear. I liked the line about Pansy loving the fact that all attention was on her: it showed how well Daphne knows Pansy, and says a lot about her character and love of showmanship.

The information about Daphne and Astoria's father was very interesting. Was he called to fight for the Death Eaters, or trying to find his daughters? It was interesting how he was killed by debris, not by a wizard. I loved the description of him as being beautiful and arrogant, and his "beloved daughters."

I liked the description of Draco, and how washed out and unhealthy he seemed. Of course sweet Daphne would prescribe some delicious treats as a cure! I think you succeeded in emulating the old Draco here while putting him in a more regretful, somber post-war position. Well done! :)

I love Astoria here as well: how she rebukes Malfoy's language but is brave enough to speak up. And I think she might have a little crush, though of course I am privy to some spoilers in the HP verse. :P I love how she just walked out, and asked Malfoy if he was coming with her. "Alright then" ... ah, it was wonderful! :)

I'm excited for another update! :)

Author's Response: Hello! And can I say again, how happy it's made me to receive all your wonderful reviews!

Haha, I think that Daphne's taste in drinks is definitely superior to Pansy's! I'm kind of glad you feel bad for Daphne- although in some respects I think it's good for her to have to confront Pansy and her past :)

I'm pleased that the awkwardness between Adrian and Astoria came off- I found it surprisingly difficult to write! You're totally right about Pansy loving it though :P

Daphne and Astoria's father only really took shape as I was writing this chapter, so I'll try and concentrate on developing him more! I think he'd been called to fight for the Death Eaters, but his reasons for doing so were more in the line of protecting his family than vanquishing the Mudbloods so to speak! It's great that you liked the description of him :)

Something I was really, really wary of was writing a lovely, kind, reformed Draco in this, so it's just wonderful to hear that both the old Draco and a post-war Draco come through! I'm so glad!

Hehe I've wanted to write a Draco/Astoria for aages and though they're more of a side-plot here, I was still happy to get a bit in! I'm glad that you picked up on the way Astoria doesn't like his language, but stands up with him. Hopefully she'll do him some good! :P

Thanks again for another brilliant review! I'm planning to post Chapter Seven in the next couple of days, so yeah! :)

-Bethany


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