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Review:HeyMrsPotter says:
Hello! Here from the forums for your review. I am SO sorry it's taken me this long to get around to doing it, it was my birthday over the weekend and I got a little distracted!

I really like your characterisation in this story. The little character quirks are lovely, I particularly liked the paragraph after Harry goes missing when they're all sitting around the table.

You create a good sense of mystery throughout, with the disappearances and the mystery characters, it definitely kept me interested.

The general flow of the story is good, adding the dates of each event helped but didn't interrupt the flow which is good.

There are some good descriptions but I think there is room for some more, particularly the garden in the end of the story, I'd like to know more about it.

I did spot a couple of errors:
"Answers that would now go unanswered." I think should be questions that would now go unanswered?
"Wizangamot" should be Wizengamot
"Mom" should be mum as the characters are British.
"11" should be written as words, as a rule any number less than 100 should be written in word form rather than number.

Overall I liked this, it's the first time I've read an alternative defeat of Voldemort story but I definitely enjoyed it. Good job!

Author's Response: Hi! It was no problem!

Thank you very much!

I have corrected the errors you pointed out. "Answers" is now "questions", Wizengamut is spelled correctly, "mom" is now "mum" and "11" is spelled out. Thank you!

I've added a note in my file to add more descriptions, particularly of the garden at the end. I will be working on that.

This piece was one of my first stories. I got taken in by the April Fool's Day theme this year (How can you completely forget what April 1st is? Exhaustion is the only thing I can plead.) and deleted a few stories that had romance too intertwined. I reposted this story after April Fool's Day had passed.

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

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