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Review:marauder5 says:
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Third time's the charm, eh? She finally did it! I was so exited when you succeeded. So you said that you liked writing her - I absolutely loved reading her. She seems like a very interesting character, and since you didn't give away that much about her background, I'm interested to find more about her family's pureblood values etc.

I do have one tip for you: to make the story even more interesting, you can try to show what's happening or what happened, rather than just telling it. For example, you could have showed Amy's naughty side by describing a few events that shows it, and you could have had a flashback of when Ronan proposed, or when she met Charlie. It's just a tip :)

Also, I noticed that you referred to her mother as mom. The british say mum ;) It's not that big of a deal, but it might make her sound more British.

Other than that, this was really great! I am definitely intrigued by this character and her family, and I can't wait to read more. I know that something will happen between her and Viktor, so I'm just hoping that they'll run into each other in Diagon Alley, now that Viktor is staying at the Leaky Cauldron. Interesting. This is likely to be a love story between the two of them. Amy might think she has already found her soul mate in Charlie, but my guess is that she's wrong. Charlie doesn't seem that interested in her, does he? So she needs to move on from him, and Viktor needs to move on from Hermione. Well, you've built up the start to a really good story here, so well done!

Author's Response: Hi! Nice to see you back! :)
Haha, if you're really glad she managed to escape, I must have done good with her characterization. It's hard to make someone think like that, so the sentence is like a compliment to me. I purposely haven't explored her character too much in this chapter for I think it would be fun to get to know her from Viktor's perspective. But you'll certainly find out more about her soon. =]

Yes, I had thought about writing incidents from her past to show her naughty side, but somehow I couldn't think of any. So when I'll think of a good prank I'll definitely edit. ;)

Mum? Oh I didn't know that. I thought you can call your mother anything anywhere around the world. ;) But thanks for letting me know.

Ah you're a good guesser! You've almost guessed my whole plot it seems. ;) Anyways, I can't say much about the plot right now, but it's definitely not just a love story. It has many more twists and turns for example in the 5th chapter which I'm currently writing. =]

Thanks for the lovely review! Hope to see you back here with another one! :D


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