Hey there - stopping by with your requested review from the forums! :)
You know, it's weird but I think this is the first Frank/Alice story I've read, and it's definitely the first I've read which deals with the attack on them and its effects, looking inside Alice's mind, so I was already so curious about this before I even read it.
Honestly, I loved it. It's great. Your characterisation is brilliant - I loved how Alice was quirky, the child of hippies (right era, yes!), and younger than Frank, and adored animals, and Frank was brave and confident and strong and yet somehow they fell in love. It's not totally opposites attract, but it's definitely a meeting of two different personalities, and I like that you found that balance rather than just going one way or another.
Also, I loved how, in a way, it wasn't so much about Alice herself as it was about Alice and Frank and Neville, and her relationships with them, and Marlene and others. It's something I'm sure I can't really explain, but I liked it nonetheless. It's not something I've seen very often, and it worked so well in this.
Your style was lovely. It flowed beautifully, there were no grammar or spelling mistakes, Alice's voice was so sweet and yet not perfect, and she was just such a real character that I really liked her pretty much from the first word.
I loved the allusions to the differences between the muggle and wizard worlds, like how Frank knows about christenings, and Alice doesn't. The members of the Order of the Phoenix were great, too; I loved how Marlene and Frank were such great friends, and how Marlene lost everyone and you referenced the attack on her family mentioned in canon, and how they got married in the office just before a raid... your details were just so fantastic. They really filled this out so it felt almost like a glimpse at years of a life, rather than just moments, if you know what I mean.
You also made the horror of the war come across so subtly, making it a sort of understated undercurrent that ran throughout it, without having to resort to lots of gore and violence to get it across, which is really, really great.
So yeah, basically, I loved this. There is absolutely nothing I would change, tbh. I couldn't find anything wrong with it, any mistakes, I don't have any suggestions... yeah, it was great :) Feel free to re-request!
Author's Response: Hello! :)
I wrote this story for a challenge, but had never really thought much about Alice and Frank either! Writing them was a great experience, and I'm very honoured that you enjoyed the story.
I'm glad you liked Alice's characterization, and all her little quirks and qualities. I wanted to make her original but also make sense that she was Neville's mother. I loved writing their relationship and while they're not exactly opposites, they are very diverse and individual people. I love your comment about Alice not being perfect, as that's just how I thought she would be.
I understand what you mean about the story being about more than just Alice, and I wanted to show a little piece of the frightening world they would have lived in. Also, hearing the story felt like a whole life instead of short moments is just wonderful to hear. I'm glad the war came across as being subtle, but an integral and unavoidable part of everyday life.
Thank you so very much for this really lovely and thoughtful review, it was such a wonderful review to receive! I'm very flattered that you enjoyed the story and all the kind words are very encouraging! :D