I stumbled upon this the other day, and it's been open on my computer as a reminder to read & review. Boy, am I glad I did. Oh my gosh, Kiana, this is seriously amazing.
I love the way that you characterized Remus - as always the outsider. I think the narration in this story really adds to that, because it has that similar detached feeling, that really serves to emphasize Remus's isolation from everyone else. I love how he ends up commenting on his own emotions, because it really kind of shows how introspective he is, rather than being directly involved in everything around him.
You do an excellent job portraying Remus's emotions in this, as I feel so bad for him throughout. I love the burst of anger in the middle: "Yet, where were they during the war? They didn't do anything to prevent this from happening. They didn't do anything to prevent him from turning traitor. They left them to fight the battle to the bitter end, on their own. It is only now that they decide to turn up." That anger is often a significant part of grief, and I like that you capitalized on that here, because I can see Remus feeling that way.
I hate that the poor guy blames himself, but once again, that's another really important element of grief that you throw in here. "He allowed them to become one of the fallen." This line was beautiful, and really shows how much Remus blamed himself, and how gutted he was by James', Lily's, and Peter's deaths.
The description in this little one-shot is beautiful, and really adds to the overall mood by creating a really sombre atmosphere.
The ending was absolutely perfect. I wanted to cry - it was just that heart-wrenching. "The reign of darkness is over, yet Remus still cannot find the end of his tunnel." This was a fantastic way to end this, as it really wraps up the story and shows all the pain that Remus is feeling.
Overall, this was beautiful, and I'm so glad that I clicked on it! :)
Author's Response: Hi Taylor, ah this review it was lovely ♥
I'm so glad that you liked Remus' characterisation he's a hard enough character to crack at the best of the times, but trying to capture him when he's grieving was surprisingly hard! I always thought of him to be an introspective person and I'm so glad that you picked up on it!
I've never been through the same level of grief Remus must have been going though so hearing you say I did an excellent job of it turns me to mush. It felt to include a bit of anger, because if I was in his situation I would be angry at the others, so it's great to see that you thought likewise.
I hated writing that line as it was so wrong and not true of Remus, but it's what he must have been thinking at that time so I had to include it. I'm so glad that you liked it though!
I'm sorry I made you want to cry! Everyone seems to really like the last line which is surprising as I wanted too keen on it, but it got across, like you said, that Remus is suffering and probably will do for a long time!
Thank you for this amazing review Taylor, it really made me smile ♥