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Review:missclaire17 says:
I really love the descriptions that you put on this chapter. With a story like this, I think that it really enhances not only the imagery but a sense of what it's like to be in Draco's head.

It's interesting to note that Draco hangs around the old Slytherins that reminisce about how much better it would be if Voldemort had prevailed. He thinks that they are fools but he still hangs around with them. That to me speaks a lot about how much Draco needs a clean break.

The fact that Astoria was there to help Draco out when a barman kicked him out of a bar because he "was" a Death Eater just spoke tons to me. They were HORRIBLE to him, though probably with good reasoning on their part. Draco seeing Astoria was to me the first step to him sobering up. The fact that there was a kind soul that he was connected to without having all of that bad history with probably made him have more faith in his abilities to really go on with life in general.

I do love that he wrote that letter to his mother. Even at the end of the day and everyone might look down on a mama's boy, Draco still is a mama's boy in many ways because he turns to her for guidance no matter how much their nagging might irritate him. I like that final touch you put there by the letter to his mother. "Show, not tell." There, you really showed rather than tell Draco's intentions.

Sorry it took so long to leave a review for you! It's been SO busy this month; the business is quite literally unprecedented.

Overall though, I quite enjoy this story! (:

Author's Response: Hi!

I'm really glad you liked the descriptions. Even in a story that's very character-driven, I always think that the small details are what really sells the reader on making the events believable.

You're pretty much spot on. Draco hangs out with his old housemates because they're the only ones who don't shun him other than his parents. He desperately needs a change of scenery.

Astoria wanders into Draco's life at exactly the right moment, when he's literally at rock bottom, and shows him a way forward that he hadn't really allowed himself to imagine. She is young and sheltered and pretty naive at the start of this, which is actually a big part of her appeal to Draco. She's completely untainted by the war.

To me, Narcissa was the only real support system Draco had during and after the war. His father always seemed like a broken man after he came back from Azkaban, and the Dark Lord's residency in their home stamped out whatever spirit he had left. I always thought there were four distinct and very strong mother figures in the books: Lily Potter - the mother who sacrifices her own life to save her child, Molly Weasley - the traditional mother figure who sacrifices material things to raise a family, Minerva McGonagall - the mother figure who sacrifices having a family of her own and Narcissa Malfoy - the mother who sacrifices her own beliefs to try to protect her child. Each is different, but that common thread of sacrifice is there in each case.

I'm glad you were able to find the time. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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