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Review:ValWitch21 says:
Hi Lululuna (had to recount the lu's in there)!

Wow. Just wow. The way you got into a Death Eater's head was stunning and flawless. The pace, the train of thought, the way he was persuaded to be fighting for something better... It was all eerily scary, but at the same time, I could understand why and how this man had been lured into fighting for what he believed was right.

What particularly struck me was the opposition between despise of his son for turning around, and at the same time deep love for him. I felt terribly sad when Theo rejected Thanatos and spat to the floor, despite the fact that Thanatos (love the name by the way, and how very fitting for a Death Eater to be named death) is someone who doesn't deserve that we be sorry for him.

Andromeda's inclusion was perfect too -- her anger is competely justified, even though I don't approve of her reaction. She reminded me of Bellatrix there.

A few tiny mistakes I spotted:

"Supporters of the Dark Lord," McGongall begins You forgot an a in her name.

Her eyes tensed into narrow slits, her wand pointed straight at my heart. "You. Are you Nott?"

Slowly, I nodded.
This is in past tense whereas the rest is in present tense.

Other than that, this first chapter was, like I said, flawless. The flow was particularly beautiful, in my opinion, and I can't wait to get to chapter 2!

Author's Response: Hello! :)

I'm so excited that you liked the story, and thought the writing style suited the characterization. It was surprisingly natural for me to write Thanatos, and I'm glad that the contrasts which define him came across.

Ah yes, I thought that name was just too perfect to pass up! I'm really happy you felt sorry for him, despite him being a rather awful person. He does have some redeeming qualities, like his love for his sons, and I wanted those to come across. I'm glad you liked Andromeda as well, and that you compared her to Bellatrix! :) I actually imagined an angry Bellatrix fuelled by love instead of cruelty when writing Andromeda.

Thank you for pointing those out, I shall go back and fix them! :) Thank you for this lovely review! :D


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