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Review:WeasleyTwins says:
Hello! Here for a bit of Gryffindor review tag!

This was for a challenge, right? What exactly were the parameters for the challenge, if I may ask? (I think it would be helpful for you to put that in your author's note :D).

Now, the stuffed penguin. Literally cracking me up - it's a great contrast to the enormity of the piece and the dark mood. I'd like to think that the black and white from the penguin symbolize the Dark Arts versus goodness and love. Even if stuffed penguin might be a comical bit, it could (and does) symbolize more in the story.

Your descriptions at the very beginning are great! Your dialogue between Ariana and Gellert is also good. Overall, I think you've got a good story here! It's very difficult to write a story around a challenge - sometimes they are amazing and sometimes it just fails. But here, I think you've taken what you were given and did a good job! It was a good read!

Shelby

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I've added the parameters for the challenge in an author's note at the beginning. But yes, this chapter was for the challenge. After I had written and submitted it, I realized that more than just one wizard/witch had become dark. So I changed it a little to be a collection of stories as wizards/witches took their first steps into darkness, whether they wanted to or not.

The penguin was used as a manifestation of Gellert's guilt.

This story was very interesting to write. Blending everything together was a challenge. And this is the first story that I've written where the villain is the protagonist.

Thank you very much!


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