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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello! I just found this story today and have read through the first two chapters. I REALLY like the premise of a story set before the familiar eras. I also like that you didn't outwardly state the time period, and it's just little hints - the importance of manners, people's titles, the governess, etc. I'm enjoying guessing when it's supposed to take place - I'd say early 1900's, 1910s? I'm visualising her living in an estate like Downton Abbey, lol. But I'm hoping you'll eventually clarify the time period by maybe an offhand mention of "current" events in the muggle world (as Merissa is a muggle-born, these things would be important to her).

I was surprised with how easily her parents took to the idea of her being magical. Yes, her father was uneasy with it, but they didn't put up a fight about it. They were oddly supportive after finding out that their daughers were witches.

I also think another thing that would have helped would be a little more element of wonder. Merissa's reaction to Diagon Alley was good, but to everything else she seems pretty unaffected. If I were an eleven year old who'd just found out I could do magic, and then was faced with a SUPER magic-y place like Hogwarts, I'd be in awe of everything. Kind of like the way Harry is in Philosopher's Stone.

I hope I didn't sound too critical - I really do like it! Going to continue reading it now :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I have given the date a little further into the story.

I am interested in writing about an era of history that I've read so much about.

I am in the process of changing the parents' reactions a little bit to be more realistic.

I've added a note into the chapter to add more of a reaction for Merissa with magic. I'll be working on finding just the right balance between expected behavior and her expression of wonder.

Thank you very much for the feedback!


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