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Review:marauder5 says:
Hello! I'm here for the review tag!

This was a very good start! I'm not sure where it will lead, though - Hermione and Ron are one of my OTPs, and so I hope you won't split them up and have Hermione run off with Krum. Well, anyway, about this chapter:

I loved the descriptions of the Burrow in the beginning. The thing that stood out for me was George's flowers, and Mrs Weasley's suspicions towards them. Although, I have to say, I'm a bit disappointed that they didn't explode and covered everyone in something sticky and messy, haha! (Of course, Mrs Weasley would probably never have forgiven George. But it would have been funny!)

I liked the little details you put into it: like the fact that table legs had to be quite tall to keep the cake safe from James. However, just wondering: you made it sound like he was the only child there. Surely that's not the case, right?

It was definitely interesting hear about Krum's back story, since we basically don't know anything at all about him from the books! I liked how his father didn't want him to play Quidditch, and how Hermione stood out in the crowd of girls, because she liked Viktor, and not Viktor Krum, famous Quidditch player. I think it would sound more authentic, or like Krum in the book, if you wrote him with his accent, the way J.K. Rowling does, but that's just a suggestion. Just to keep his voice true to his character from the books, if that makes any sense.

Hm, it definitely seems like he wants to win Hermione back. Why else would he stay in London?? Also, the part about Hermione giving him the love and warmth he had never received form his parents... that was perfect! It definitely explains why he's still hung up on her, so it makes perfect sense.

All in all, this was really great! Your descriptions, especially, stood out, and I'll probably come back and check out the next chapter some time ;)

Author's Response: Hello! :)
Don't worry, I'm not going to split Ron and Hermione. I love the pair too! Rest of the story is mainly focused on Viktor and my OC. I advise you to read the story summary before guessing the plot. ;)
The wedding scene is just for a nice beginning. I wanted all the characters to be canon, so I put some details in. We cannot tell what happened to the flowers after Viktor left, so they may have exploded or they may not have! James must be the youngest amongst the Weasley grandchildren don't you think so? George is much older than Ginny so his kids would be older than James I think. :)
I always thought Krum had an interesting back story, though Rowling never told us much about him. Krum's accent is hard to write and I thought it might spoil my story so I didn't put that in. But I'm glad you liked the reason of Krum's love for Hermione.
No, no. Viktor isn't the kind of guy who'd do anything to win his love back. That poor guy is planning to get money from Gringotts and spend some quite time in London.
I hope to see you back soon! Thank you for leaving the wonderful review! :D


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