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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums.

This definitely made for a fun read and I quite enjoyed it. I think you did a good job of emphasising on the 'no romance' aspect of it and making it humorous at the same time with all the cooties talk and all.

Your descriptions were pretty intricate too, not too much and not too little. They set the scene pretty well and I could imagine the setting in my head so good job there.

I enjoyed your characterisations of Lorcan, Lysander, and Cassiopeia immensely. The rumour bit about Cassiopeia being the illegitimate daughter of Grawp and Maxime, and what not, was really funny. I also liked the way she intimidated Lorcan. Lorcan's portrayal as a scared guy also was shown really well.

The plot was unique and entertaining. The whole idea of gobstones was really great, and all in all, I enjoyed it. According to me, the title suits the plot so I don't think you need to change it =)

All in all, this made for a fun read and I really don't have any CC or suggestions for you. You've done a good job with this!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for your wonderful review!! :)

It was really nice to know that you think this chapter is fun and humourous. I'm not usually a very funny person, so writing this way is a bit out-on-a-limb for me. I think that the story is going for a really off-the-wall, crazy spin, especially in future chapters, so perhaps it's good that this first one kind of sets it up for that.

And thank you so much for enjoying my characterization of Cassiopeia! Those little rumours were random thoughts that I had as I was writing the chapter, and they seemed to fit her pretty well.

I'm very glad you like the title; to me, it sounds a tiny bit lame, but I guess it really does make sense with the story.

Thankyouthankyouthankyouthankyou so much for your praise-filled and wonder-fabulous review!

~UnluckyStar57


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