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Review:Maelody says:
"Moss hung from the branches like soft frizzy gray-green hair waiting for the breeze to flutter it as gently as the Veil hidden deep within the Ministry of Magic." Right here is when I instantly fell in love with this story because your description is so beautiful. I was thoroughly pleased when I saw this was a continuous style as well.

Your writing is so beautiful, and so descriptive. I honestly 'heard' everything in my head. Ariana's whispers and giggles, Gelert's shouting and breaking points. I even saw everything and I was genuinely creeped out! That right there is an accomplishment because I find it very hard to get creeped by writing. I have to see it, but that's what you did. You painted this story with words and I watched it. The whole time I kept thinking "This would be AWESOME if it were podcasted!" haha. It's so amazing!

Admittedly, it was so wonderful in the beginning, and then you went on about a penguin. The very first time I read that part I thought I was walking into an April Fool's type story and I would be reading this serious fic about penguins haha, but then I realised it was more of a symbol. When they're not being fluffy and adorable as babies, those things do grow up to have quite the beadiest of eyes, don't they?

I really don't know how to go on about this review without continuously showering you with compliments. That's my bad I suppose ;). I thought the flow was wonderfully done, and I just couldn't stop reading it. I was sucked in. I was watching Gelert talk to the ghost of Ariana through the penguins eyes! ;)

I had found one typo though, but I can't even remember where I saw it or what it was. :( Though it was just the one I spotted, and it wasn't that bad at all. Though if you want to give it a bit of a read through, maybe that'd be good? (I'm trying to give out some help here, yeah? ;))

Overall, it was very lovely. The characters were beautiful visually and characteristically. I'm glad you requested, and don't hesitate to do so again! :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

This was a very interesting story for me to write, a step out of my comfort zone. I tried my best to visualize what was happening and writing as I saw the story unfold. :)

I agree, penguins grow up to have beady eyes. Out of the list of items we could choose, I chose the penguin first as it is my sister's favorite animal. So I thought why not try to write a story including a penguin?

I will look for the typo and fix it. I've done a quick scan but didn't see it at first glance.

Thank you very much!

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