Hi Kiana! I'm so sorry for the lateness of this review. :P
Alright, so this chapter is more serious than some of the past ones, and rightly so, given the gravity of the situation, what with Mulciber and Regulus and all.
I like the scene with Sirius and Regulus, because it really shows a lot about Regulus's character, in that he's not fully on board with the pureblood ideals because he still cares about Sirius, but he's too afraid to fight back. That's always the way I've seen Regulus, never truly believing what he was taught but following it anyway - and that's the reason Regulus was a Slytherin and Sirius was a Gryffindor.
I can definitely imagine Voldemort and Bellatrix flipping out after Sirius ran away, and I like that you included that Sirius's father stood up for him, at least somewhat, because I think Sirius's father would have had to have been a little bit nicer than his mother. Speaking of his mother, I can definitely see her going into a rage too, based on what we see of her in the books.
For the most part, I like Sirius's thoughts in this chapter, as you can see that he's definitely trying to juggle the mess with Thalia and also all the drama going on with Mulciber and Snape as well. I do wish he had been a little more humourous in this chapter though. I know that they're in the midst of the war and all, but I feel like Sirius might have maintained a little bit of his humour in the process, just because that's who he is. :)
I love that Sirius got bitten because he got distracted by Thalia - it was a nice way to break up the war-related drama and show that Sirius is still dealing with his feelings for Thalia amongst all of the other things that are going on.
The scene at the end was very well done, in my opinion. I like that the boys all used relatively "nice" spells, as compared to the curses that all the Slytherins tend to use. It really shows just how different they are from the future Death Eaters. Mulciber obviously isn't a very good actor, as we see here. :) I'm not surprised that Snape was the brains behind the operation, and I'm interested to see what Sirius's revenge is going to be. Part of me wants to say that it's part of his "worst memory", but I really don't know. :)
Another really great chapter! Feel free to re-request!
Author's Response: Hey Taylor, don't worry about it, compared to some people this is really quick :D
I hated making this chapter serious it wasn't as fun writing it, but like you said it would have felt weird otherwise.
I'm really glad that you liked the scene with Regulus as it was so much fun to write. I've always loved the contrast between the two brothers as they're so similar in some ways but due to being sorted into different houses they turned out to be so different.
Woo someone agrees with me on the Sirius father front. I was really unsure about including that, as I know I like to think some of his family still cared about him but I wasn't sure if others thought the same! I'm glad that the other people's reactions to him leaving was fitting too, as they're so unpredictable you don't really know what to expect.
I'm glad that you liked most of his thoughts as they were so chaotic and running from one thing to another I wasn't sure if they made complete sense. Now you've mentioned it I'll go back and add some humour as I wanted to include some but I wasn't sure so I just left it.
Haha, that was fun to include and it happened to Harry in his Herbology OWL and that minor detail always stuck with me so I really wanted to include it here.
Eek! I'm so glad that you liked the end scene as I hate writing action scenes so I was really worried about that. The boys aren't the nicest of people in fifth year, but I agree they would never use horrible spells on them. Hmm, it's not the worst memory but it is canon ;)
Thank you for this great review and I'll definitely go and add some more humour to make it lighter!