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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello darling, so I'm back to review the next amazing chapter of your wonderfully thought-provoking story!

Firstly, I enjoyed (well, is that the right word?) the section about Simon. His insisting that he will not be reduced to an animal status was very approapriate, I thought, considering the treatment of Jews during the Holocaust since they essentially were stripped of their humanity and identity. The little details that went into this section, such as keeping his shoes on, and the contrast with the well-outfitted Nazi, were really effective in "showing," not "telling" both the state of the world Simon inhabits as well as his individualism within it.

The part about Xavier conjuring a mattress actually made me laugh. It must be so convenient to be a wizard, eh? Feeling tired? Conjure a chair! Papercut? Conjure a bandaid! I wish I was a wizard... All that aside, however, I loved the flashback to what these characters were like before the war. It's great to see these other sides to them, as well as the contrasts like the girls giggling amongst themselves and Camille's continuing resentment of Xavier, despite there being bigger things going on around them. It makes them more relatable while showing how war changes people.

I feel quite sorry for Jean, having to put his personal feelings aside and go ahead with the murder of his uncle, for the greater good as it were. It's hard to tell how close they really were, but I enjoyed the detail about blowing fire in his uncle's face.

Simon's relief that his sisters won't get pink triangles, and thus be exposed to worse abuse, was very interesting as well. It's like he can only afford to care for his family, and cannot extend that love and pity to others as long as his sisters are safe. I feel like in another place he would have cared deeply, but in his situation he simply does not have the strength to worry about others.

I thought this was another excellent chapter and the story is so far progressing at a natural and strong pace. Great writing, really! :)

Author's Response: Hello lovely!

I don't think I should be happy that you enjoyed (for lack of a better term) Simon's section, but your compliments really warm my heart. You're very right about the Jews having been stripped of their humanity, which is exactly why I wanted to have Simon battle against that.

It would be so easy to be a wizard, I wish I was one too...

I didn't know whether or not I should introduce Camille and Xavier's relationship so soon, to be honest, because it seemed so trivial in comparison to the rest. You have no idea how happy it makes me to hear that it helps makes the characters more relatable.

It's interesting that you feel sorry for Jean, as you're one of the only ones. Personally, I have mixed feelings towards him, because I feel like the way he puts 'the greater good' first is very dangerous.

YES. You're one hundred percent correct about Simon caring in another situation. The word 'afford' is exactly what I wanted to convey.

Thank you so much for this review :3


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